55 Fiction is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.
Caught In Her Own Web?
Narrow crowded by-lanes are always a sight. The vehicles honking incessantly; the hawkers shouting, trying to outdo each other; women haggling with the vendors, children eyeing the toys, greedily… she observed nonchalantly.
Listlessly, she bought a few things and rushed out. “Perfect!” she smirked.
“Madam, your bag”…said the panting boy.
And the bomb exploded.
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Good one..u becoming an expert
ReplyDeleteOh..
ReplyDelete55 Fiction is like 20 20 cricket... Short mai Niptae.. :-P
Wow.
ReplyDeleteGreat talent you are.
Ending is totally "bolt from the blue".
Good job.
I couldn't help laughing!
ReplyDeleteBut an excellent one!
Wow! Kya "dhamakedaar" ending hai...!!!
ReplyDeleteoopss...superb!!!
ReplyDeleteSUPERB.. gr8 idea, gr8er execution.. definitely ur best post i'v read till now.. its like yuvi scoring 6 sixes in an ovr in a T20 match:)
ReplyDeletethis post desrves anothr comment.. i read it some hours ago bt cudnt cmmnt as my net cnnction wnt down.. however, evn aftr cuming back nd reading it again, the reaction is same.. i havnt read many 55ers bt um sure evn if i hd read 100 of thm this wud hav been d best:)
ReplyDeleteOne request.. the wrds hav exceeded 2 56(yup i alwez count thm), u mite remove 'kites' to make it xact 55:)
Reminded me of a Telugu movie named 'Majnu' wherein the movie ends in the same way you wrote!
ReplyDeleteBut its very electrifying! Your post I mean!
haha! reading such stories is always a pleasure! post some more please...and visit my blog some day
ReplyDeleteThat was gr8 !!! never guessed the ending ... very nice
ReplyDelete@ ALL : Thank you guys and gals!!
ReplyDeleteYour feedback is truly motivating!!
And I am one happy blogger!!
Thank YOU!! :)
@ Vipul: I don't know, Microsoft word count showed it to be 55, but when I counted it manually (or is it mentally!), it was 56!
So deleted the kites, as suggested.
Thank a lot for your feedback! :)
Beautiful post Shilpa. So this time you decided to let the readers know the end of the story..eh?!
ReplyDeleteVERY, VERY Nice!! I loved the tension of this.
ReplyDeleteI do 55 fiction and flash fiction myself, so I'm already an afficionado!
Ranee
@ Amrit: Thanks Amrit. Yeah, though the feedback given in the last 55 fiction was a need for a happy ending...but could manage this!! :)
ReplyDelete@ PEOPLE, PLACES, VOICES, FACES...: Am happy you liked it! Will check out your 55 Fiction too!!
A haiku on ur 55 fiction!
ReplyDelete"she came out and the boy followed with the bag - explosion"
this happens to be my first main stream Haiku, so please feel free to comment! :D
@ pawan: A good one, Pawan! :)
ReplyDeleteCame to know about Haiku at Ranee's blog.
Read some articles abt it. Thought of trying it...but didn't!!
gud one!!!!!!!!!!1 short but big enuf to understand the picture behind it!!!!! come up with some more such blogs
ReplyDelete@ Sumeet: Thanks! Hmm...that's the idea behind 55 Fiction. Apart from that, there should be an element of Drama, Suspense and Shock!!
ReplyDeleteKaboom! This was great :-)
ReplyDeleteI am your competitor at Indiblogger :-P but your are leading :-D
@ Sangfroid: Thanks!!
ReplyDeleteYou are leading, and the voting is gonna end soon!!
Congratulations!! :)
OK. WOW.
ReplyDeleteReally Cool!
Keep it up! :)
Hey its very nice. :)
ReplyDeleteWell! I'd voted even before reading it...it was a right decision. :)
Already voted. Its a great 55er
ReplyDeleteNothing short of awesome!Great goin'!
ReplyDeleteShort,crisp and to the point.
ReplyDeleteCONGRATS.
The last four words twisted everything! Like the post...
ReplyDeletewonderful!
ReplyDeletevoted for you!!
Very very creative!!
ReplyDeleteI am new to blogging..... where can i vote for u?
@ All : Thank you friends for your feedback and support!!
ReplyDelete@ Abha : Thanks Abha and welcome on A Rose is a Rose is a Rose!!
Well, the voting is over!! And I won too! :)